Portfolio Reflection

i dont have very many strengths as a writer. im not very good at coming up with thing to write about.peoms because they are easier to write.the worst would have to be essays because it is hard to come up with thing to write about.i dont have very many writing habits at all. spelling and gammer are the biggest problems i uncounter. to have good writes and get them done one time.

Piece Reflection

My goals for this piece was to get it done and have people like it and what to read it. i began this piece by think about people that i have lost. And that they will never b coming back in to my life.i ended it saying that even though u lost one friend rthat there is many differnet other friends you could make.i didn't really encounter any problems with this piece. i chose this piece as my best because i put a lot of work in to this piece.

Write compositions with a variety of sentence structures and lengths

compond:We dont know where the friend has gone, but they are no longer here to be your friend.

simple:Losing a friend is a time of sadness and mourning.

complex:She kinda felt bad because if she hadn't said anything then they would still be friends, but she had to get over it cause things happen in life that we can fix.

compond and complex:She kinda felt bad because if she hadn't said anything then they would still be friends, but she had to get over it cause things happen in life that we can fix.

7)Demonstrate correct grammar and sentence structure.

This went on for a couple of months and Faith couldn't take it anymore, so she went the office and asked if she could talk to the principle. After she talk to the principle she walked back her class room and went and sat down at her desk. Class was stared when the principle and a man in a uniform walked in and ask the teacher if the could talk. Everyone was confused, but not Faith.

Use a variety of techniques effectively to provide supportive detail in writing

One day at school Faith walked into her class room and there was a note on her desk. The teacher wasn't in the room yet so she opened the note and it said, “Everyone hates you and you should have friends because you mess everything up with everyone. And if u show this to and one I will hurt you.” Faith had a idea who wrote the note but like the note said she couldn't say anything to anyone so she put the note into her pocket and got ready for class. When she got to class she noticed that no one wanted to sit or talk to her. There was a group kids that were in the corner of the room laughing and looking straight at Faith. Faith knew that something was going on and she knew exactly who was the one starting it all. It was her ex-best friend Kaylin.

5)Write with strong organization and coherence.

Kaylin is loud, out going and really funny so that's how her and faith get a long so well. They meet each other one day at the communitys main park. They were both in 5th grade and they were both in the same class and then just became best friends and have been that way for ever since. The only difference between them is that Kaylin is friends with almost everybody else in their class and Faiths have no other friends then Kaylin.

4)Use strategies for editing

A lot of them make fun of her beause of the way she does things or the way she says things.

a lot of them make fun of her because of the way she does things or the way she says things.

3)Use strategies for revising

Your guiding hand
Your shoulder to cry on,
Somebody for you to lean on.
I want you to see that I'm always here.
I'll never be your judge or jury
Because I don't care.



Your guiding hand
Your shoulder to cry on,
Somebody for you to lean on.
I want you to see that I'm always here.
I'll never be your judge or jury
Because I don't care.

2)Use strategies for drafting

One day at school Faith walked into her class room and there was a note on her desk. The teacher wasn't in the room yet so she opened the note and it said, “Everyone hates you and you should have friends because you mess everything up with everyone. And if u show this to and one I will hurt you.” Faith had a idea who wrote the note but like the note said she couldn't say anything to anyone so she put the note into her pocket and got ready for class. When she got to class she noticed that no one wanted to sit or talk to her.


There was a group kids that were in the corner of the room laughing and looking straight at Faith. Faith knew that something was going on and she knew exactly who was the one starting it all. It was her ex-best friend Kaylin.

this part of story needed something added to it so i added these few sentences to finish the paragraph.

1)Use strategies for brainstorming

In Dallas, Texas there is a lot do to do, u would think but in Faith's neigberhood its just her. Faith lives one a dead end street. There is a lot of kids on her street but they are all younger or older then her. Faith is a ever loud and out going person. She is ever active in sports and she loves to be outside doing things,but when it is time to making friends she isn't the best at it. Most people in school think that Faith is weird because she moved from New York City to Texas. A lot of them make fun of her because of the way she does things or the way she says things. For being so out going and loud Faith is ever quiet when she is around people at school. Faith does have one really good friend and her name is Kaylin.

pain, everybodys got it...

Heather Lamfers
Lang Arts 9
11-1-10


Discomfort, Grief, Caring

Pain

Richard belis Said “Pain is so deep and cunning, pain can show me who i am, pain shows the world who we are, pain is my only friend.” The dictionary defines Pain as Suffering, ache, Sorrow, Grief. My defintion of Pain is something that you feel when some one you know leaves for a short or long period of time. It could also mean a lot of differnet thing to many differnet people.In a life time everybody expericence pain in some way most comine ways you feel pain is discomfort, grief and caring.
The first topic that comes to mind when taking about Pain is discomfort. Discomfort is something you would feel when you are not feeling good, hurt mentally and also phyically. There is many differnet ways to have the feeling of discomfort but most people like me I feel it the strongest when I have lost some one that is very close to me.This helps my defintion because most people feel the discomfort that I feel when pain is inflixed.
Another topic that comes up is grief. There is almost always a giref when there is pain. Like if someone makes some one else have pain they would always have the grief of making them have that pain. This word helps with my defintion because there is almost always grief after there ia pain. Like if there was someone that die that you new or was close to you. You would have the grief of knowing them and not being able to help them so they wouldn't die.
The last topic is caring. When people have pain there is also others that are caring about them. I think that caring is something that people do when there are others that are need it or just do it cause thats what they do. If there was someone that I knew that had someone close to them die I would b there caring for them lot because I know how if feel is lose someone close.
Discomfort, grief, and caring are the three most comine was you feel pain.
Discomfort, grief, and caring are very important when u think but pain. Discomfort is something you would feel if you yourself were the one in pain. Grief is something a lot of people feel when the lose someone. Then there is caring. Caring is something that is very important when you or someone else are feeling. People just have to know that when they are feeling discomfort, grief or caring that its not a bad thing. Also when people are feeling this way that they shouldn't feel weird because almost every person in the world feels these feelings when they experince pain.